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You Better Watch Out

You Better Watch Out is a scary story for Christmas written by a member of this website named Pete (with a little help from Scaryforkids). It’s about a hardened criminal who carries out a robbery at Christmas time.

You Better Watch Out

As Tommy Wilson walked through the main entrance of the mall and into the foyer, he heard the loudspeakers playing “Jingle Bells”. Shoppers were milling around, rushing to buy gifts for their loved ones. It was December 23rd and, after the stores closed that night, there would only be one day of shopping left before Christmas.

He strolled past Santa’s Grotto, where a fat old man in a tattered beard was handing out cheap presents to an assortment of children. Behind him, was a tall Christmas tree, decorated with sparkling lights, shimmering baubles and candy sticks. A train chugged past on a track, going around and around in a circle, carrying a load of gift-wrapped boxes.

All around the mall, there were a large number of mannequins, dressed in santa suits. They stood there silent and motionless as the customers filed past. The strange thing about them was that they all had a very peculiar design. Their mouths were hanging open and Tommy noticed that their eyes seemed to follow him as he walked past. Despite the warm temperature inside the mall, he found himself shivering a little. Something about those weird-looking mannequins really creeped him out.

As the speakers played “We Wish You A Merry Christmas” and “Deck The Halls”, Tommy went up the escalator and made his way to the jewelery store. He had a contented smile on his face because he was planning to buy an expensive necklace for his girlfriend. This was the first Christmas they were spending together since Tommy had been released from prison. It was also the first Christmas that he was buying presents with money he had actually earned himself.

Tommy had spent two years in jail for breaking and entering. While he was locked up, his girlfriend stuck with him, visiting him at least once a week. She made him promise that he would give up his life of crime and become an uptanding member of society. Tommy was determined to keep that promise and, as soon as he got out of prison, he found himself an honest job that payed a decent wage. It wasn’t a lot, but at least he wasn’t doing anything illegal.

As he entered the jewelery store, Tommy suddenly stopped in his tracks. He was shocked to see someone he had hoped would never lay eyes on again. Willie “The Snake” Marko. Less than three years before, they had been partners in crime. When Tommy was just a teenager, Willie had taken him under his wing and started him on a bad path. He had shown Tommy all the tricks of the trade: How to hotwire a car, how to get past an alarm system and how to always stay one step ahead of the cops.

All that came to an end, one fateful night, when they broke into a warehouse. The police had been keeping the place under surveillance and Tommy was caught red-handed. Willie was waiting in a car outside and, when the cops swooped in, he managed to escape. Tommy was not so lucky. He was arrested, charged and sentenced to spend two long years in prison.

Willie always had a strange look in his eye. The kind of look that told you he was up to no good. As Tommy stood there and watched the older man, he saw the same devious look in his eye. He knew what Willie was planning to do. He had his eye on all of the expensive jewelery in the display cases and Tommy was sure he had no intention of buying any of it.

He sidled up to Willie and gave him a nudge. “Dont do it,” he whispered. “It’s not worth it.”

Willie turned his head. “Well if isn’t old Goody Two-Shoes!” he chuckled. “I thought you were still in the slammer. When did they let your sorry butt out and since when did it become your business to give me advice? Just because one of us went soft doesn’t mean the other has to.”

Tommy sighed. “I’m just warning you,” he said. “If I can turn my life around, so can you.”

“I don’t need no sorry-ass ex-convict telling me what to do,” growled Willie. “Besides, you think I’m dumb enough to carry out this job in broad daylight? You were always the stupid one. If I tried anything now, with all these people around, I’d get nabbed for sure and end up just like you. I’m too smart for that. I’ll come back and do my Christmas shopping tonight, when the stores are all closed.”

Willlie stormed out of the shop, leaving Tommy standing there, shaking his head in disappointment.

Later that night, after all the stores had closed and the workers had gone home for the night, Willie’s van pulled up in the little laneway behind the mall. He quickly bypassed the alarm system and, taking a crowbar out of his van, forced open the emergency exit. He slipped inside and carefully closed the door behind him. Then, he made his way up the back stairs to the second floor.

When he came to the jewelery store, he knelt down in front of the display cases and took out his lockpick. Within a few minutes, he had all of the cases open and was filling a canvas bag with gold and silver jewelery.

Just as he was tossing the last of the items into his sack, he heard the mall’s loudspeakers spring to life and start playing a song.

“you better watch out! You better not cry!”

Willie was frightened and decided it was time to make his getaway. Clutching the bag of jewelery in his hand, he scrambled out of the store and made his escape, running back the way he had come. However, when he reached the back stairs, he stopped suddenly and stared in shock.

“You better not pout! I’m telling you why!”

In the dim light, he could make out somebody standing at the top of the stairs, blocking his way. At first, he thought it was a woman, but when he looked closer he realized it was a mannequin, dressed in a santa suit. Its mouth hung open and its eyes stared at him.

“Santa Claus is coming to town! Santa Claus is coming to town!”

Sensing something was wrong, Willie doubled back and headed for the escalator. When he glanced over his shoulder, he thought he saw the mannequin following him.

“He’s making a list! He’s checking it twice!”

Slowly, the escalator descended and, when he reached the bottom, Willie made for the exit. Again, he stopped in his tracks. Standing in front of each exit, blocking his way, was one of the same mannequins. As Willie tried to make sense of the situation, he thought he saw the mannequins begin to move their arms and legs. He turned to retreat up the escalator, but there were two more mannequins blocking his path.

“He’s gonna find out who’s naughty and nice!”

Willie cried out in terror as the mannequins advanced towards him. They surrounded him, cutting off any escape routes. As they closed in, their hands reached out and grasped at him, their eyes grew wide and their jaws dropped open, revealing rows of serrated teeth. He tried to fight them off, but there were too many of them. They overwhelmed him and, as he collapsed to the floor, they swarmed over him and he felt their cold fingers clawing at his clothes, tearing out his hair and ripping into his flesh.

The last thing he heard was: “Santa Claus is coming to town! Santa Claus is coming to town!”

Bright and early, the next morning, the staff at the mall arrived and began opening up their stores. The employees in the jewelery shop found everything just as they had left it the night before. The display cases were all locked and the jewelery was all in its proper place.

The store had only been open for five minutes when suddenly, terrified screams were heard echoing around the mall. The employees looked out the door and saw a middle-aged woman standing outside, pointing at the display window and screaming her lungs out.

There was something wrong with the mannequin in the display. Blood was dripping down ts torso and pooling on the ground. On the mannequin’s shoulders, where its head should have been, there was something else…

A different head…

A severed human head…

As the store employees gathered around the window and stared in horror at the terrifying sight, the mall’s mannequins stood silent and motionless in their positions and the loudspeakers blared out a merry Christmas tune:

“You better watch out! You better not cry!
You better not pout! I’m telling you why!
Santa Claus is coming to town!
Santa Claus is coming to town!”


  • thanks, you’ve ruined Christmas for me, for probably the next few weeks. thank gosh it’s summer…

  • This reminds me of the first episode of Doctor Who, when Rose was escaping the Christmas mannequins! Awesome story.

  • Awesome @pete ! I always don’t like mannequins much. They’re freaky and motionless. 5 out of 10 mannequins!

  • Well, I have always found mannequins to be creepy, but now, im so DONE. im scarred, hopefully I don’t run into an today at the mall…

  • Pete, you are the best story writer EVER!
    I think that in your original pete i think that the mannequinns are the guards of the mall, right? cuz there should ALWAYS be night security in the mall

  • I’m going to level with you here, this was predicatble. I’d be liying if I told you I didn’t tell you I seen any of this stuff coming. BUT, I like the lovecraftian point of view of it.

  • The creepy thing is I saw mannequins like the ones I originally described in my mall yesterday and that’s where the original version takes place.

  • Hey Pete, do you have other stories posted on this site? If so, where can I find them. BTW, your story rocks! You and sfk make a great team.

  • I Wasn’t going to put an about the author thing so you shouldn’t have gave me that so yeah…

  • Sorry I just checked now. I don’t mind. I write a lot of scary stories. This is the second one posted on here though SFK altered both and made it better. I was walking through Macy’s shopping and I was in this back part by the furniture. It seemed empty and an employee was just standing there looking right at me and I wasn’t sure if he was real or not. It was kinda creepy. I live and was born in Ohio and and am 22.

  • Never mind i dont wanna be traced down by the fbi or something for nothing and the book is taking too much room on my computer. So dont answer the questions.

  • If you feel some of these questions are uncomfortable and they are private just answer the ones you are comfortable with

  • So pete answer these questions:
    What gave you the idea at Macy’s to write this story?
    Is this your first story?
    What is your age and name?
    Where were you born?

  • Oh god this is a good story!
    You’re bringin’ back the chills, both literally and figuratively! Keep it up, you guys!

    Those mannequins are staring into my soul aren’t they.

  • oh um Pete will you be on this site on sat or sun i gotta talk to about it in the book i need some info meet me right here in comments


  • Frosty the snowman had a very shiny knife he’d stab you in the eye and watch the blood flow right down your face!hehe snowmen are evil….people could be in the snowmen….and when you walk past the snowman….Oh you better watch out,you better not cry,you better not pout and im telling you why,santa clause is killing tonight!he has his knife and your in sight santa just killed someone tonight!Merry (early) Christmas!

  • I have one posted “Satan Claus Is Coming To Town” about an evil Santa and another “Silent Night Gory Night” about a killer priest coming this weekend. plus “Beware The Snowman” which is winter themed instead of Christmas themed.

  • Hey Pete, I can’t wait for your next story…
    Even if SFK doesn’t post it, I can still read it on the “tell your story” Column….
    Yay For Pete And SFK! :)
    And I can’t wait for the next Story…

  • I’ll try writing that but I have in December but I might not get to it for a while. Also it’s up to SFK if they want to post it.

  • @Pete congrats nice story dont even think i can write one,cant wait for “The christams thief”

  • There is vaiant I wrote called “The Christmas Thief”. It doesn’t take place in a mall and the character is turned into an elf by Santa himself. I’ll submit it later.

  • Thanks SFK. You made my story even better just like my last one. BTW I got the idea for this when I went shopping in Macy’s. Here is the original version for those who are curious:

    Tommy Wilson walked into the main entrance of the mall. “Jingle Bells” played on the speakers as he strolled into the center where Santa was greeting children. A tower with a few levels and some decorations stood up behind him and a train that went around in circles on a small track was behind that. He went up the escalator and past the food court into one corner of the mall to buy some gifts in a store. After he purchased them he went into the Dillard’s to look around and possibly buy more gifts, after that he proceeded to go into the JC Penny, Sears, and finally the Macy’s. As he wlked around various music played including “We Wish You A Merry Christmas” “Deck The Halls”, “Sleigh Ride”. and “Winter Wonderland”. This was his first year since he retired from crime and all money he made from the job he got for probation was spent on Christmas gifts as well as saved for rent and other bills.

    As he entered Macy’s he saw someone he hoped he’d never see. William aka Willie “The Snake” Marko. He was his ex partener in crime. He was the one respnsible for the bad path he went on as a teenager. The judge saw this and when Tommy was arrested by the police and Willie managed to escape the judge gave Tommy a year of probation. He knew that look in Willie’s eye. The kind of look that told you he was up to no good. Tommy saw Willie his eye on all the expensive jewelery in the display case and knew he plannnd to swipe it for some easy cash. Tommy quickly confronted Willie. “Dont do it he said. Give up now while you can”. Willie turned his head. “Well if isn’t goody two shoes. Just because one of us went soft doesn’t mean the other has to. I mean you think those stories of bad people being captured by a magical mannequin amd turned into mannequins by Mr. O’Macy themselves are true? But since you warned me Willie said there’s too many people here, I’ll come back when it’s closed”. They quickly glanced around and looked at all the mannequins that seemed to be overlooking all the shoppers. Some were dressed as elves while one was dressed as Santa. Beard, face, and all. That one seemed the most creepy and seemed like it had every shopper in sight at all times. Willie thought for a moment then turned back to Tommy. Willlie left with Tommy looking at him in disappointment. Tommy then turned and headed back into te main part of the mall and back towards to the center and out to his car.

    Later that night, about an hour after closing time Willie snuck back in and went to the display case on the first floor first, then the ones on the second where he encountered Tommy earlier. Every time he went aound and opened it from the back to avoid tripping alarms. He accidentally tripped over the equipment that set the radio to the speakers resulting in “You’re A Mean One, Mr. Grinch” playing while loaded all th jewelry into his bag. He was walking around whenhe noticed the Santa mannequin was gone. Thinking nothing of it he continued to walk around till he noticed something red standing in the darknss over in the furniture and living section. He walked up closer and realized it was the Santa mannequin and it was walking towards him.

    Willie ran towards the Christmas section and thought of how he could escape. Since he didn’t bother to bother turn it off the radio started playing “The Nutcracker Suite”. That gave him an idea. When the mannequin approached he threw a bunch of nutcrackers at it, knocking it down. He then slid down the store escalator and down to the lower level. He noticed all the mannequins seemed to be missing. As he approache the exit to the outside it was blocked by sone of the elf mannequins. In fact all the exits were. All except the exit to the main part of the mall. He knew how to pry open the gates that were used to close stores. He quickly ran to it but felt a a firm tig at his legs. In fact he flt a bunch of tugs. He turned to see the elf mannequins pulling him back. He tried to fight them off but couldn’t. he last thing he saw was the Santa mannequin approaching him.

    The next morning Tommy went to Macy’s hoping to the police at the scene of Willie’s crime. He was hoping he could turn Wille so he could reform as well. However there were no cop cars parked outside nor was there evidence of any crime. He walked around and all the jewelry was in place. Everything was exactly where it was the day before. Only thing that seemed different was a new mannequin. Tommy couldn’t place his finger on it but something about it looked familiar. Tommy shrugged and left Macy’s figuring maybe Willie had a change of heart after all.

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